The only reason I saw this song is because I saw some of your old reviews and I like how your honest and don't do one liner reviews. I don't have the time I used too so my reviews are more rushed so apologies in advance if I say something that doesn't make sense to you.
First off, is this a loop or a song? The ending feels unfinished and reading from your description, perhaps your going to resubmit a finished version soon.
Your fx and instruments sound overused. I have heard all these sounds in fruity loop songs...probably the most popular program for NG users. Maybe next time work on creating more unique sounds. A easy way is mapping out your EQ in all crazy sorts of patterns and mixing weird waveforms together. Layering is another way as duets tend to sound better than a solo.
Perhaps it is just me, but for trance songs I like my percussion to be crisp. The kick sounds dull and the high hats filtered out. Intensify those high frequencies on the hi hats.
As for the composition, it is no surprise what I am about to say, but for a song to use that bass pattern is unoriginal now. However, I wouldn't mind if it were used in a part of your song.....however all your climaxes use it. There is a song called "Dolphin" from Greg Downey that is a rare case where he has great fx and accompanying composition where that overused bass pattern can still be utilized and stay exciting. That is what you need to do if you decide to stay with that bass pattern.
Oh, you should try sidechaining once in a while. Sounds much better with it.
Good song overall. Work on the composition and instrument sounds a bit more. 5/5 review + rate.
Bye for now